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I like this. It's short, concise and to the point.

The art style is also quite appealing.

That was brilliant.

I really don't know what else to say. Sums up my experience with other people just about perfectly.

It's interesting.

I'm not sure what was happening near the beginning to 'make' the salt appear. The rest seemed pretty straightforward.

Still, it must have been hard to try and tell this story using the simplest objects imaginable. Nice work.

I sense... a lot of despair in this animation.

Perhaps it comes from the wish that more time had been allotted to it. It feels like it was unable to fully voice itself.

I wish you the best luck in the future, as I wish myself the same.

You've got a good start here. However, this is by no means a finished animation.

If you want to learn how to not have the animation repeat, you must first have a preloader. You can get them on Newgrounds, and putting them in your first frame will automatically stop the movie until the Play button is clicked. When the movie loops around, it'll stop again at the preloader button.

Alternatively, you could convert this to a video file using Swivel, and as such, could also upload it to YouTube, but YouTube is for lame-o's, and you should always submit your stuff here first.

Best of luck.

The ideas are there. The character is there. Now you just need to get the drawing style there.

I'm not gonna suggest you make it look more like a traditional animation. That's boring. However, it is apparent that you are still starting out when it comes to animation. Keep working on your craft, and take notes when watching other peoples' animations you like, and you will get there eventually.

Best of luck!

willcamick responds:

Thank you for your review. Ill take what you say into consideration :)

The animation wasn't bad by any means, but on Newgrounds, we expect cartoons of more substance.

You're off to a good start with the style though. If you expanded this and added some music at least, you'd have a good thing going here.

D0S81 responds:

thankyou, i appreciate the constructive criticism, a lot of the work on newgrounds blows my mind, 'Mr Bees' comes to mind. the guy that does that has some skill. It was actually 'Hyun' of those awesome stick fights that told me about macromedia 8> I know i have a long long way to go before imanywhere next to that caliber of animation, but fingers crossed. Its very time consuming, i worked on this for about four days for a few hours a day. it only takes so long as im self taught. hopefully the next vid i do will be better.

No Kirby? 0/10

Kidding. This is really cool, and I'd be stoked if you make it into a real series.

RetroSleep responds:

Haha, Kirby almost made it in too.

Thanks, I don't have any actual plans to make a series, I'm a one shot kinda guy. haha

Eh, you might want to format this with a preloader and replay function next time.

The music keeps layering over itself, and that's a big problem if you want to watch it again.

You obviously put a lot of work into this animation.

It's just too bad the message will be lost on most of whom it is meant to be heard.

Depending on your goals, it may have been a better idea to take a more gentle approach, but what is done is done. I just hope you are ready to deal with the inevitable hate.

"We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of the dreams."

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