Fubaka's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[William Garfield]

Zeroth point: No preloader or replay button. That hurts no matter what your submission is. Look into it please. Either that or make it a video file with Swivel.

First point: When you submit something to Newgrounds, it should probably be longer than 4 seconds.

Second point: Is William a slug with a head or did you forget to draw the rest of him?

My two cents: I like your drawing style. Make it longer and you will have a winner. This sort of thing also seems like it would make a great children's story, that seems to be the angle you are going for with the art style and the one line you have in it. It would be nice to see something akin to Winnie the Pooh, where William Garfield gets involved in light-hearted adventures and we get to see his friends.

Also, is he supposed to be reminiscent of U.S. President James Garfield?

[The Bookworm]

It wasn't bad. However, I feel it lacks the right amount of humor to carry this sort of scenario.

Proper comedy requires careful consideration. Let me break down at each scene what I thought would have happened to make this funnier:

0:14 - What exactly is this thief's motivation? Seems like he just got started stealing the books, but why has nobody else tried to stop him yet? I'd think this would work better if the thief were an obvious literature-based supervillain of some sort, always cracking book-based puns and intimidating libraries into giving him their books, much like you'd see in an old comic book.

0:44 - As soon as the bookworm finishes his line here, I expected one out of two possible outcomes:

a) They immediately find that all the library's 'resources' have been stolen and the thief is attempting to drag a comically oversized bag of books out the front door.

b) While mired in their books, they finish only to find that not only has the thief already gotten away, but it's also been several days.

Side note: It seems so wrong to me that you drew so many books, and yet almost none of them have any text or pictures on the cover. This is a golden opportunity to fill those covers with all sorts of puns and bad jokes! Embrace it!

1:12 - While low-res explosions are always fun, I really don't think this works as a punchline. Come on! The guy's stealing books, so why not use an example from a famous book to foil him? Get the kid and the bookworm to roleplay a little, and you could reenact Shakespeare or something, then the thief (being the book nut he is) may have little choice but to join in! That's when you get him with a proper punchline that was foreshadowed.

Sorry if it seems like I'm being harsh, but you really are half-way to a great front-pager here! All you need is to up the comedic potential and do some lip-syncing! Take examples from other cartoons here on NG to see how it's done and you will go places!

[Paper HL2: Episode One]

Aww man, I was hoping for something like Paper Mario. :P

Still, top notch sound design (it is a Valve game, after all) and excellent use of gestures to tell the story without any dialogue. Had it been me, however, I would have included the scene with the strider and the one with the overseer in the citadel.

[We Gotta Get Spongebob Ba]

It's not customary of me to leave reviews like this these days...

but this animation just has too much win to deserve anything less than a ten from me.

[Woobirds' Valentine]

No reviews yet? We'll have to fix that.

I thought the animation was very well done, and the music was a very good choice. Did not quite understand the beginning silhouette sequence, but I shall let artistic liberty fly for this one.

Keep up the good work!

PhilStankus responds:

Thank you!

[Ink Blots: Inx]

Very cute.

Animation was well-done. You should definitely make your future installments longer though.

InkBlotCreations responds:

Oh, don't worry, I will. This is really just a taste. Until then, you at least have something to enjoy! <3

[Tetragon Hall]

That red streak through the tetragon pretty much tells you everything you need to know.

Masterfully done.

[Creative Task 2014]

Glad to see you are still making stuff.

A few things to mention:

-Animation style is a bit basic, but it does its job well. I do wish it were a bit faster-paced though.
-Why does this animation loop the way it does? I'd prefer being given the option to manually replay it. Perhaps you could use Swivel to make this into a video formatted cartoon.
-I hope the people they are visiting have more to do than just standing outside of their desert huts in the middle of a barren wasteland. :P

Don't be discouraged by the lack of viewership! Keep making cartoons!

[An important lesson]

Is this supposed to be our generation's take on the story of Icarus?

If so, bang up job!